This weekend’s Trifextra challenge: We are giving you the first 33 words of a story. You need to complete it with 33 of your own words.
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“There’s nothing cute about it,” he said. The register of his voice indicated decision more so than discussion.
She disagreed heartily and privately, staring past his head and out the window behind him.
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Surprise
“There’s nothing cute about it,” he said. The register of his voice indicated decision more so than discussion.
She disagreed heartily and privately, staring past his head and out the window behind him.
She nodded, took the unopened box left by the “Happy Birthday” singing waiter and retreated to the bathroom. She removed the Super Bowl tickets, discarded the box and returned to their final date.
Thanks so much for linking up to Trifextra. Remember, this weekend’s entries are being judged by the Trifecta community, so I hope you were able to cast your votes. (there’s still just over two hours left if not!) Winners will be announced with the Monday post. Hope to see you back then.
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A perfect ending! That’s what I gotta say.
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And thanks for what you gotta say!
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Ooo, ouch! Nice twist, there.
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Thanks, chrstnj!
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That’ll teach him.
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Doubtful, but miracles do happen!
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oh man, to see the 33 words BEFORE would be great too!
nice job!
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Ha! Great thought!
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Ouch. Bet he wished he invited her but kept the tickets himself.
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He’ll never know what he missed!
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Now, how to let him know what he missed, or?. I think I would have her just keep walking and not return.
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Ooooo. that would’ve been good.
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Great job. Here’s my submission – but only to you since I don’t actually participate in Trifecta.
“There’s nothing cute about it,” he said. The register of his voice indicated decision more so than discussion.
She disagreed heartily and privately, staring past his head and out the window behind him.
“I hated that sofa anyway,” she thought to herself. “If he makes me choose between him and the dog…”
The dog trotted into the living room with her husband’s shoe in his mouth.
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You really should enter that!
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Aren’t these stories supposed to be fictional?
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No, they just need to fill the requirement – in this case, 33 words to follow their 33 words.
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I agree with Guapo. You should submit that!
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Crap. He coulda gotten lucky too!
Wonderful answer to the challenge.
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I have a feeling he wouldn’t know luck if it slapped him upside his head.
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oh…………. he does not deserve a girl like her. she needs someone who appreciates her whimsy and charm. Now she has the chance to find that guy– who knows? could be the waiter!
best,
MOV
(my comment on your essay is– count them– 33 words)
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“could be the waiter!” Perfect!
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Sounds like he just missed a massive opportunity, and she’s got some prime real estate to scalp!!
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Or to give to another fella!
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“… returned to their final date.” The poor fool …
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I don’t pity the fool!
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Good for her!
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I’m with you on that!
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Love it.
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Well I appreciate that. Thanks for popping by!
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*Waves hand . . . I’ll go, I’ll go. 🙂
Great take on the prompt.
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Thanks, Barbara!
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AHHHHH! I’m laughing as I’m typing. Poor guy! Guess she’ll be looking for a date for the big game!
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If only he wasn’t such a stuffed shirt…
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This is really good – a lot is said about the relationship (and where they both thought it was going) in few words.
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One reason I like these particular challenges is they make you consider every word. Thanks for your kind words!
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This is sad. But a cool surprise ending. Excellent job on the challenge.
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I don’t know why I always get my serious face for these challenges. lol
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