Trifextra – “push”

Posted: March 2, 2012 in Fiction
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Trifextra Week Six weekend challenge. Using the prompt complete the following story in exactly 33 words. The prompt does not count towards the limit of 33.

The phone rang at 4am.
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The phone rang at 4am. Crystal calling with the roving party location. Slice loved this dark subversive life. But waiting until 4 was excruciating. Excruciating. He mainlined at midnight and immediately collapsed. His subversive party days were over.

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  1. karen says:

    Ooooh. I like that very much.

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  2. Dana says:

    Yikes, so intense! So much story told in only 33 words… excellent job.

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  3. fghart says:

    Rich with subtext. A not-so-nice, but well-done, response to the challenge.

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  4. Jill K. says:

    This one really drew me in and felt complete. Good stuff.

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  5. jesterqueen says:

    It seems he figured out he could inject without celebration. Heroin dreams, Slice.

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  6. Trifecta says:

    Thanks so much for linking up to Trifextra. Remember, this weekend’s entries are being judged by the Trifecta community, so make sure you visit the site at the close of the challenge to vote. Our linking service will not allow you to vote for a link from the same computer where it was submitted, so plan ahead! Voting closes 12 hours after the close of the challenge. Winners will be announced with the Monday post. Hope to see you back then.

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  7. Amanda says:

    Wow. That was both really good & disturbing all at once. Good job!

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  8. Mel says:

    I feel like that sometimes when I crash at 8 after the kids go to bed. 😛 I liked the use of the word “mainlined”. Well done!

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  9. whiteladyinthehood says:

    wow…(and only 33 words!)…impressive

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  10. I like this challenge. Think I’ll give it a try. Thanks for the idea!

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  11. Nicely done! so much said in this tragic piece.

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  12. I love your short shorts 🙂

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  13. Tara R. says:

    A tight 33 words, a lot said in this short paragraph.

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  14. Well done, John. It’s not easy to tell a complete story in just 33 words, but you did!

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