Trifextra – “boundaries”

Posted: June 16, 2012 in Fiction
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This weekend’s challenge brought to you by the fine folks at Trifextra. Please give us a creative piece inspired by the photo below. You have two options for word count: you can either give us 33 words or 333 words. Please note: we are not asking for a post between 33 and 333 words. We are asking for a post that is exactly 33 words or exactly 333 words.

(photo courtsey of Trifecta)

Jenny learned a long time ago Teddy was a most clever bear. She remembered the morning she woke and saw Teddy on the floor. He said he wanted to explore the house. She remembered when she put him on the couch and he disappeared. She found him in the backyard. Teddy said he asked Pickles the dog to bring him outside because he wanted to explore. Jenny told Teddy good bears don’t leave without permission. Teddy said he was a good bear, but also an exploring bear. Jenny said if he wanted to explore they must go together, just like she does with her Mommy. “You have to obey me,” she said. Teddy said okay, but Jenny knew he might explore again while she slept. She decided to make sure everything was safe.

Jenny examined the backyard fence. Sometimes Pickles dug a hole and went under it. Jenny found no holes for Teddy to escape through. She told him over and over he could never explore outside the fence. She pointed out how tall the fence was. “Even a clever bear like you cannot climb that high,” she said hoping Pickles would not show him how to go under the fence.

Jenny’s Mommy took them to the front yard. Jenny looked in the bushes and saw Teddy could not get lost exploring them. They went to the fence by the road. Jenny looked at it very closely. She had to make extra sure it was safe because the road was the most dangerous place ever, even for clever bears. She checked it three times and clutched Teddy a little tighter before declaring, “Teddy cannot get on the road.”

“I agree, sweetheart. He will never get on the road like that one,” Mommy said, pointing to the cow a short distance away.

Jenny looked at the cow. “He is not my cow. He lives someplace else and his Mommy did not make it safe.” She grabbed her Mommy’s hand and said, “Teddy is safe.”

  1. I was a bit worried when I started reading since I have been seeing all of the trailers for that movie, Ted, with Mark Wahlburg ( Thanks for not making him a rude, obscenity spewing bear!


  2. Thank you so much for linking up to Trifextra this weekend. The challenge this weekend will be judged by the community. So please come back to the Trifecta home page and click the stars next to the three posts you most enjoyed. You only have until Monday at 8 am EST, so hurry!


  3. kgwaite says:

    You portray the mind of a child so very well.


  4. jannatwrites says:

    Nice story! I like how she models her mom’s behavior in making things safe for her bear.


  5. Nice job, John. Look at you, writing from a little girl’s perspective. Very sweet. 🙂


  6. Libby says:

    Great story! The girl has a ton pf personality!


  7. Quite imaginative – the characters as well as the story. I enjoyed reading every bit of it.


  8. Jenny is delightful here! I love her imagination, her mischief loving dog, and her anxiety for her bear. She felt very real to me.


  9. Mel says:

    I really like how you make Teddy safe at the end.


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